I have a job that suck, toxic people can’t bear them anymore. I have 3 months before my internship is completed. So i decided to start my software agency. I built my website https://jsgdevelopers.com/. I bought a bunch of leads from fiverr, basically those businesses who had shitty website. I pitched about 5 people but no one is even responding back. I feel really demotivated. Here is one of the email i sent just for example

Dear [Customer Name],

I hope this message finds you well. I’ve had the pleasure of reviewing your pressure washing website , and I believe there are two critical areas for improvement.

Design: A captivating design is essential to leave a lasting impression. Our expertise lies in crafting sleek, modern designs that captivate your audience.

Mobile-Friendliness: In today’s digital landscape, mobile compatibility is paramount, especially for a service-oriented business like yours. We specialize in creating seamless experiences across all devices.

I’d be honored to collaborate with you on building a website that truly reflects the potential of . Let’s chat further about how we can make this happen.

Looking forward to the possibility of working together.

Warm regards,

My Name

and company logo and website link and mobile number and location as signature

I don’t know what is wrong. Are my emails not personalized enough? (i even attached some screenshot of their website in 1 of cold email). Is it sounding fishy? Or its just luck not working out

Any help would be highly appreciated

  • vuxanov@alien.topB
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    11 months ago

    There are many problems with your email:

    • Its spam
    • It is trying to sell to early
    • You have built zero trust and rapport
    • Its spam
    • You bought spam list